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Very good. Excellent work, Ihpkmn. +1.

This came about as a result of a discussion about Author Avatars. A certain person said to me that it's never a good idea to name your author avatar after yourself, because it precludes any form of character development. Essentially, if you let your character get too close to you, they become boring.

So, I decided to try an experiment: take one of the most controversial characters on the site, as well as an author avatar, and try and give them character development. Whether this succeeds or fails is up to the vote. But, even if you're tearing it to bits, I hope you enjoy tearing it to bits.

If people like this enough, I might try something with another AA, like, say, Dr. Bright or Dr. Rights, Crow or Strelnikov even Dr. Gears. (Yes, I am talking about the characters. I won't smack talk the authors. Do I look like an idiot?¹.

Anyway. Enjoy your tale about one of the most famous characters in site culture dying!

Bwah. You made me feel, Ihpkmn. That'll do.

I mean, I don't even LIKE Clef.

(Not the real guy, the character.)

Eh. Too melodramatic.

… Three out of five?

I am Ok with 166 being clef's kid. That's the only thing I really care for.

I don't really care for Wacky Clef, but I like Narmy Clef even less.

I like the idea of Clef as a reality anchor. I think this works.

It's an interesting idea, and I'm not totally against the whole "everybody's pretty much dead at this point" schtick, but overall it did come off as too melodramatic. I want to be emotionally manipulated in a subtle way, and this is the opposite of that. No vote.

The writing itself was mostly good….but part of it was killed for me by just how exposition-y Clef was being about, well, everything, but in this fan-service-y way of resolving every little loop and twist of Clef's long backstory/rumors.

It almost felt like you were trying a little bit too hard to cram in as much of Clef's story, and made it come out in a way where Clef is just relating streams and streams of facts, a lot of which the reader would already know. Plus, the whole theme of Clef being tired and sad and dramatic has been pretty well played out as a "Counter-Clef" movement of sorts.

That said, I can't downvote due to the mostly good writing. But I still can't upvote for those reasons.