SCP Foundation

1) Psych Logs: Are they believable? Could you see an appointment like this happening within the foundation?
2) Date Chapters: Does it show character development and growth for Dr Alto Clef and/or Dr Isabella Pahlke? If not, what would you like to see more of for either or both characters?
3) Ending: Does this wrap up the events of the story in a way that is interesting and/or enjoyable? Is the ending satisfying while leaving an opening for future iterations of this story arc?
4) Formatting: Does the formatting fit for the tale? What could I do for ease of reading and chapter access for readers? (I am a novice at wiki coding so some specifics would be helpful)
5) Upvoting: Would you upvote this if it was on the wiki? If not, why? (unacceptable answer: "It's a romance". If you aren't into the genre I'm not sure why you would come read this. I want something much more helpful than "I don't like romance")

Thank you so much to anyone who reviews and gives me feed back! I appreciate it greatly!

1) Psych Logs: Are they believable? Could you see an appointment like this happening within the foundation?

Therapy sessions between Dr. Clef and a psychiatrist like Pahlke, generally, make sense. I can believe Dr. Clef, a generally uncooperative person, would continue to be just as uncooperative during a session. I can also believe to some extent said psychiatrist they assign to him would be one of the top in the field. Him slowly opening up makes sense and bringing up certain things that make Clef uncomfortable such as his daughter would be things that would happen in a session. Some specifics regarding tone and content are a bit off the wall for me but my gripe with that isn't exclusive to the sessions specifically so I'll address it later.

2) Date Chapters: Does it show character development and growth for Dr Alto Clef and/or Dr Isabella Pahlke? If not, what would you like to see more of for either or both characters?

These are the chapters I skimmed the most of so frankly I don't have a very good grasp on what happened in them specifically besides "they went on a date, and some shenanigans ensued." There seems to be multiple separated parts all entailing the first "date", I honestly don't know if all of them are necessary.

3) Ending: Does this wrap up the events of the story in a way that is interesting and/or enjoyable? Is the ending satisfying while leaving an opening for future iterations of this story arc?

The ending as a concept is… okay? The execution, however, bothers me. People gathering together and clapping seems excessive and unrealistic, it's like those /r/thathappened posts where they always have to mention how after they said something "everyone stood up and clapped." No one really does that. The way O5 acts also doesn't really line up with how they're usually portrayed. Like, they set up Clef and Pahlke because Clef was being dramatic and suicidal and Pahlke… worked too hard? The reason for the former is weak at best and the reason for the latter just doesn't make sense, why would they be concerned a specific psychiatrist in the foundation is too "isolated" because she works so hard? She's making tons of progress for them and hadn't shown any other reasons for concern.

What would have been believable to me, personally, would be that Dr. Clef's antics from basically being bored and sad and immortal were becoming too disruptive to the rest of the Foundation's work and they needed to have him stop. This relatively new psychiatrist they hired seems promising and maybe as a bonus psychiatric/personality evaluations seem to hint to her actually being able to get along and possibly calm down Clef. They wouldn't plan to "set up" the two of them romantically because it's farfetched for that to be a coherent plan, even for the SCP world, but on discovery of their relationship decide to let it slide because, very frankly, Pahlke has managed to stop Clef from disrupting the foundation as they had hoped, even if it was via "unconventional means." Analysis of the quality of work the two of them had recently been putting out would add to this decision, showing both of them have been significantly more productive lately.

4) Formatting: Does the formatting fit for the tale? What could I do for ease of reading and chapter access for readers? (I am a novice at wiki coding so some specifics would be helpful)

Do not post this as one big tale. It is huge, and no one will read it. Very few people can get away with monstrously large articles; those that do are written *extremely* well and every little bit that's included *needs* to be included. I don't get that here. I could cut out half of what you've written and the basic story would stay intact. Frankly if you wanted to condense this into a simple, one page tale, you could, you'd just have to remove a lot of details and choose a few very specific areas to highlight effectively.

Assuming you don't want to go that route and you want to tell a longer, more in depth story, cut this thing into chunks and post it separately. I know you said you don't think it makes sense when you split it up but I do think it's possible:
1.) "Dr. Clef encounters his new psychiatrist and is super wary of her and vows to try to dig any minor piece of information up about her to prove she's anomalous"
2.) "Fuck she's not actually anomalous, but also now I have even more questions, but also hmm is something happening here this is weird"
3.) "Date Night: The Movie, and then some spicy cliffhangers"
4.) "There's weird tension between us but also there's a containment breach"
5.) "Alright so what we're doing is 100% totally wrong but like this is fine"
6. ) "Oh no we've been caught but hey actually it might be okay maybe?? The end"

I don't think it'd be hard to reformat and rewrite certain portions so that you could break it up like this and have each tale still stand alone and make sense. Essentially each tale by itself would just be a glimpse into that present time; all you'd have to do is establish the current context. And if you can't get the standalone thing, it's fine. There are other tales that are posted in parts.

5) Upvoting: Would you upvote this if it was on the wiki? If not, why? (unacceptable answer: "It's a romance". If you aren't into the genre I'm not sure why you would come read this. I want something much more helpful than "I don't like romance")

I would not. "It's a romance" is part of it, but not for the reason you think. I'll go into details with this in the next section along with some overall general things.

This reads extremely clearly like fanfiction. It reads like *good* fanfiction, don't get me wrong, but it still screams fanfiction. There are so many tropes and style decisions and cliches that are grossly common in fanfiction: the use of the "~" tilde at the ends of some dialogue; the way some characters act, especially Clef the love interest "winking" and "giving a cocky grin" at people; the allergy to the word "said", using every other dialogue tag in the book instead; just a vague sense of melodrama at how everything happens; etc. All of these things are extremely common in fanfiction where it's 100% fine, because that's the style of writing there. But here it sticks out like a sore thumb. Now, again, as I said before, I don't usually read tales. For all I know this is actually how most pieces are written and if that's the case feel free to take my advice and toss it in trash. But I genuinely don't think most people would respond well to it with the current way it's written.

I cannot get myself to believe these people are Foundation researchers with the way they act. I know Clef is supposed to be very weird and "out there", I know Bright says and does some dumb shit sometimes. Yet the way they're portrayed I don't get "eccentric but brilliant Foundation researchers", I get "two frat boys shooting the shit about which girl they're gonna bang next." Everyone in general talks and acts like they're in their late teens to early twenties when I'd imagine they are at *least* in their late 20's, if I'm being generous. When's the last time you heard anyone that age use the word "edgelord" or describe something as "a mood"? The only people I can think of are 30 year old youtubers whose job is to literally entertain people in the late teen - early twenties demographic. I just cannot believe these Foundation members, no matter how eccentric they are, would talk like this in any serious way.

Everyone seems way too ready to just drop ethics for love. Clef muses over it for like half a chapter and then just seems fine with it. Pahlka shows some internal struggle in one chapter and then just flat out asks Clef on a date in the next. Yes it's not a "date", but it's a date, and her rebuttal to the assertion is weak and her attitude outside of her words reads like she actually doesn't care if it goes against ethics. The tension seems forced and comes off melodramatic. It'd make more sense for the internal struggle and denial to continue for far longer than it does, maybe even right until the end so when they finally admit that they're actually in love it's at the climax of the tale. Instead they seem to hit it off, struggle for half a second with it, then immediately just go on a "date", ditching their third party to get together without a second thought. Then they spend the next half of the story oogling each other from across the room before the vague threat of "ethics" finally manifests itself in the last chapter where hey jk, this is actually all fine, and we were planning this all from the start! It just comes off tropey.

What was the point of the aura thing? Again I skimmed, so maybe there was a deeper point to it that I missed. But I didn't see one, so it just seemed like some random super power you decided to give this already-kind-of-a-prodigy Foundation member.

It's a romance, and while that's okay, you're gonna have to be careful. Romance is not the most popular genre on this site and to make it land you'll need every little part of your story to land. Something that immediately works against you, in my opinion, is that this entire story revolves around a romance between Clef, an established canon and beloved character, and Pahlka, an (I believe at least) OC. You know what usually comes from a story that's a romance between a universe-established character and an OC? A self-insert. Add this to the fanfiction tone, and what you have here is self-insert fanfiction, and I'm sure you can see why a lot people won't react positively to self-insert fanfiction on the wiki. Fixing the style so it sheds the fanfiction light that's hanging over it will go a long way to help but even so you still want to tread carefully. Characters are going to have to be written extremely believable, excessive melodrama is gonna have to be removed or turned into actual dramatic tension, and events are going to have to feel natural as a progression if you want this to succeed.