SCP Foundation

Look how they contained my boy-

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Instances of SCP-5807 are to be contained within a 30x30x30 meter aviary, complete with an assortment of coastal plants and a pool that is 9x9 meters across and 15 meters deep,

Okay, this kind of suggests you just changed it from meters to feet without actually converting it. One meter is three feet. Your aviary would be the size of the Thanksgiving Candle. Your swimming pool would be as deep as seven olympic-sized swimming pools put together, or as deep as a four story building (actually almost five, but let's ignore that for now) is tall. Both of which are absurd for three pelicans.

There is an SCP-XXXX in the article.

Also, photo by me.

I greenlit this! Nice to see it up! I would make a comment stating the photo is yours by the way. There are a few formatting things that are off, but I think the way you told the story is actually pretty good! It drags a little bit and is a little confusing with certain details, but it’s solid and I think you were ultimately successful in telling this story. +1

Much better. +1 from me.

I remember seeing this back on the critters forum, and I'm glad it's made it to the site! +1

I want to hug SCP-5807-3.

This is fantastic, and the characters of each pelican are well defined and sympathetic.

Bravo +1

Did not work for me, unfortunately. As a reader, knowing that Ethel is already dead removed any emotional weight or impact the article could have had on me. While the dialogue is well written, I think the development of the pelicans is poorly paced. An emotional angle could reasonably be achieved by devoting more time to their relationship with the Foundation, showing the pelicans developing a meaningful relationship with their researcher instead of focusing on Ethel's death.