This feels like Mr. Brainwash binge read Chambers and Poe. Downvoted, I'm afraid.
Which is to say, it strikes me as an attempt to imitate the style of Poe/Chambers, but it lacks any of the substance or context. What is happening here? Who are these people, why do we care? There's no way for me to identify with any character, so I turn to the setting and prose, both of which are… Well, they're not bad, insomuch as grits don't taste bad.
Edit: Which is a shame because 2264 did the Chambers/Poe so well.
Double Edit: Context! I maintain that the prose needs work, but with the knowledge that the spoiler reference will be made more explicit, I now know what's going on enough to remove the downvote.