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If you've got this far; thanks for reading!

I'm completely open to any criticism, although I may be slow to respond; life things.

EDIT: Being the ungrateful type that I am, I forgot to thank those who helped make this readable. Thanks go to shaggydredlocks and another in the IRC. Sorry for forgetting your name, another. I should really get a system. You guys made me start to believe in this piece. It wouldn't have happened without you. (Seriously: if you can remind me of the your name I'll give you top billing in the thanks.)

Thanks also to MrWrong and Quantum Physician in the forums. MrWrong was harsh, but fair and I needed some of that. Quantum Physician was nicer but didn't shy away from pointing out what needed pointing out. I needed some of that too.

The ability of Foundation writers to make me care about fictional characters continues to impress me.

I did not expect this to be so clever and sad when I began reading.

+1

That was brilliant, heavy, and beautiful. +1

Wait, I don't understand something—

The introductory letter says that she's been conditioned to dictate her thoughts, but the Description says that 2904-1 instances can't learn by conditioning.

Also, what's the Boomtown Rats song for? Sorry, I'm dumb.

I'm not really sure what the initial note is for, but this whole thing is well written and really compelling.

This is fantastic. It has excellent pathos, and a really solid exploration of consequences. Also, reading the opening note, my immediate thought was, "Oh man, they've weaponized H.M.!", so from a science standpoint¹, mission accomplished.

If there are any downsides, the "before" section of the opening note didn't make a ton of sense, and the "Not Daeva!" line was a little blunt, but I'm not pushing those. They both work well where they are.

My only other thought was, half-seriously, why not wait for the D-Class contest? This is right on the edge of a reimagining of the system…

I thought this was really cool and well thought out. You got my feels and my upvote!

Definite +1 from me.

I do have a question about your oblate spheroid. You've only given the equatorial radius for the object, whereas I would have expected another dimension as well. Is that normal for describing something that shape? I read the Wikipedia entry in case there was an obvious answer, but no joy.

Very minor nitpick I know, but an important one, especially for the scientists out there¹

I wonder if it could be better if you put the document on separate page? That document deserves its own tales page.