J-Just why..?
J-Just why would you do this? WHO WOULD DO THIS?
"Any D-Class personnel caught consuming SCP-2514's feces are to be reprimanded."
Who does that.. Who eats feces..?
WHO DOES THAT?!
WHO DID THAT?!
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Because it's shit is made out of cake and frosting, good trade I say.
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But why would you eat shit?
omg reading that now makes a nice joke.
But really, no scent? Nothing that indicates this is not digestible, rather, shitable?
+1 because I like the idea of the joke "Eat shit bitch!" being implemented.
I might just be a sucker for Wondertainment, but I enjoyed this- I like Wondertainment being an MCD-esque ultra-capitalist money grubber that'll do anything to sell their shitty unsafe products, because without that side to them, they're just "somebody that makes unsafe toys for no real reason" which is a trap I feel like too many Dr. W products fall into
That said, I sincerely doubt I would consider this any good if it weren't Wondertainment, but it happens that it IS Wondertainment, so that isn't a valid criticism for me to make
+1, even though a false embedded link for the PoI is a dick move and makes me want to cry :'<
Is Dr. W canonically a 'her,' though? I didn't know their gender was confirmed, though there was the one Mister who remembered her being a lady
Two unexpected and appreciated details - the ill health of the poor horse, and the highly stylized weirdness of the business letter. They added a layer of verisimilitude to the SCP.
Like Tutwater (and many others, I'm sure), I'd like to find out what happened to poor Jeremy. I'm hoping he didn't become a hirsute, obese diabetic.
This reminds me of SCP-1194.
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Great rewrite of the old 2514. The idea that you're being actively forced to have happy thoughts, which distress both you and the anomaly, works well IMO. While you could have provided info about Jeremy Huertes, the fact that the information's been omitted adds to the sense that there's something horribly not right here.
Also, there have been a few horse skips recently (I'm in the process of writing a horse-related skip myself), and they've all been terrifying. I wonder how a person actually afraid of horses would think of this.
+1
Great rewrite of the old 2514
Good to hear.
Especially since I didn't read a single word of it.
While you could have provided info about Jeremy Huertes, the fact that the information's been omitted adds to the sense that there's something horribly not right here.
This is one SCP where spelling it out would've ruined the story, yet at the same time, the Foundation would've obviously know what the story is. The red text was a compromise, and I'm glad it worked for atleast some people.
+1
Thank you!
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My is Doctor WondertainmentTM crying? That bit intrigues me. The rest of it is stupendously well written, and it explains just enough to make you wonder just what the hell led to this. Good mystery, good weirdness, good horse.
Yea, there's a lot to love here - from the nice SCProcedure hook, the different take on a Wondertainment product, avoiding being over-the-top explicit, the character references, and damn was that first addenda smart. +1, this is good Wondertainment.
There's a lot of different elements here, the horse that eats whimsey and has medical problems, a story of who got the horse, unfinished Wondertainment product and… happy birthday? None of it feels like it comes together and the note at the end, while chock-full of copyright notices, felt more like an aping of the Wondertainment style than the genuine thing. I think that if you cut out the fluff and tried to focus on one of the elements this would work a lot better.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
aping of the Wondertainment style than the genuine thing
May be because the Secretary of Sincerity penned this, not Wondertainment herself.
This comment reflects my worst fears for this SCP: That people wouldn't get the concept. Mind you, I'm not blaming the audience, the fault is on me, the story-teller, for not making it clear enough. I put a lot of thought into this article, and I tried to make all the seemingly disparate pieces connect to each other so that the underlying story is visible. Unfortunately, while it all makes sense to me, it seemingly doesn't for everyone else. I was tempted to put the spoilers in the comments, or at least ask some rather leading questions, but that felt like a cop-out for my own inability make the reader draw connections on their own. The question is, how can I make the the text clearer without making it too obvious, or affecting the atmosphere I was going for?
felt more like an aping of the Wondertainment style than the genuine thing
Yeah, that's on me. I had several other articles open for reference, but I don't think I have a knack for the Wondertainment-ToneTM.
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Augh! My eyes! That poorly kerned letter! It makes me cringe so hard. Because of all the super script, there are only 2-3 lines that aren't 1.5 spaced. I know that's how the formatting makes it, but there's gotta be something that can be done to fix it?
I don't see the issue, but if you have any solutions, feel free to tell me.
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I'd suggest setting the whole letter to 1.5 or double spacing. But that's just me, and kerning was drilled into my head really heavily in my engineering courses
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