It's finally up!
Thanks to Zachary Maxwell, mlister, and MeguminTDC for the feedback! (Wish I knew how to link you guys ;~;)
Makes me think of The Wall. That's a good thing.
+1
A wonderful mixture of sad and sweet, not to mention a great representation of depression. I felt sorry for 3052-1 by the end, the poor thing, but at least it has its little potted plant to take care of.
Why refer to it as -1 and the hallucinations as -2, though? Why not refer to the stick figure as 3052 and the hallucinations as -1? I dunno, I guess that's a technical nitpick, but otherwise I really dig this. +1!
I Think That the original SCP should be 3052, and then all the 3052-2s should all be given a 3052-X Thats an idea. But I love this SCP too, +1.
Try not to post on comments that are two years old.
Dr Kramer, please don't backseat mod. Posting replies to old comments is totally fine if the new comment furthers the conversation in a meaningful way, and the previous comment is not related to a discussion that has run its course (for example, an old critique thread for a draft that is no longer being actively worked on).
Thank you Zyn, this puts more perspective on "necro posting" which is good to have, ill keep it in mind
an interesting idea, I always enjoy such things
And the story in the end, referring to the animator as "God" due to him creating them, and then he dies of drug overdose because they talked to him…
Amazing!
+1
It really is, the Drug Overdose Part could hit home for some people, which makes this even better.
For someone relatively new here, you are far ahead of those who try to do something and end up failing miserably (without wanting to mock anyone here).
And also, I like interesting ideas written well: a sad pivot full of sweetness, very original, because I have not seen any resemblance to this SCP, that is, I read an original "work".
+1'd
Lots of SCP pages are really scary, lots are funny, and lots are just plain weird. This one, meanwhile, plays 'sad' and 'bittersweet' pretty much perfectly. Enthusiastically +1'd!
Distinctly unsettling and resonant. An odd way of getting at the real core of the individual's surrender to their situational conditions, but an effective one nonetheless. Mechanically, the article's clean, and your clinical tone is spot on - especially important in this case, as necessitated by the fact that you're trying to describe both a person that needs care and the fact that they're essentially a messy jumble of organic components. The dialogue doesn't read as alien or cardboard, and the little sliver of exposition we get from the reptilian feels neither forced or stingy; rather, I believe the mild lack of context that I had elevated my enjoyment of the piece.
Excellent work. +1
Had some pretty interesting revelations while thinking about this skip at work today.
1. -1 has no mouth and no bloodstream, so medication is virtually impossible.
2. -1 thinks the voices it hears are just that, voices in its head that no one else can hear. The Foundation knows the truth. The Foundation knows that -1's voices are more than just a result of a fractured psyche. They know that the voices are alive, intelligent, and want nothing more than to have -1 killed.
I actually derived the most enjoyment from the way the Foundation handles this anomaly. They know it's potentially unstable, and aren't going out of their way to fuck with it.
Solid first work, author.