(account deleted) 11 Jul 2017 16:13
The picture is from here, and is in the public domain.
Many thanks to Hippo for his feedback.
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(account deleted) 11 Jul 2017 16:13
I'm torn. On the one hand, I like the focus on narratives and D-class personnel, and I definitely like the incident log. On the other hand, the concept is a little flat, and I don't feel like I get much out of it other than "anomalous people give you a storytelling analogy for mistakes you've made in life" and that doesn't do much for me. No-vote for now I guess.
OK- I have altered the final log a bit, because I think the whole crossposting lets-make-all-my-Safavid-skips-linked thing didn't really work here. It works better as a standalone.
Nice work! Btw, there's still some scp-XXXX in the final log, and the second experiment has its notes in the same section while the others have their notes divided.
I've been reading about the concept of story and how it relates to consciousness and identity, so this appealed to me from the get go. Wasn't expecting the darkish turn, but it worked well. The SCP has definite views on what is important, and effective ways to implement them.
Yup, like this a lot. The story with the Researcher was where I upvoted.
This is close to being very good, but I feel like it lacks the last push to bring the point home (perhaps by humanising the storyteller a bit more?) and some of the details don't add up.
"The surrounding area", in context, reads as though these all become Iranian folktales - it should probably be clarified that it's the area surrounding the subject's origin / home.
Las Vegas only legalised gambling in 1931, so a grown man in 1935 wouldn't have been born into a "city of vice". Lehman Brothers is an investment bank, so I can't see how someone could commit "bank robbery" against it as that term is generally understood.
And finally the last two stories contradict each other - in one, becoming a story is humiliation, but in the other it is the type of glory that the researcher had been seeking. If that duplicity by the storyteller is deliberate, you could afford to make that clearer.
"The surrounding area", in context, reads as though these all become Iranian folktales - it should probably be clarified that it's the area surrounding the subject's origin / home.
It means the area surrounding the current location of the coffeehouse. I'll try to find some way to clarify that at some point.
Las Vegas only legalised gambling in 1931, so a grown man in 1935 wouldn't have been born into a "city of vice". Lehman Brothers is an investment bank, so I can't see how someone could commit "bank robbery" against it as that term is generally understood.
Damnit, knew I should have checked the American details :p I'll find a replacement for them.
I'll see what I can do about altering the characterisation of the storyteller. My intention with the humiliation/glory angle was to show the differing ways it's looked at by the two different figures; the researcher sees it as death and humiliation, so the storyteller makes that part of his story, but from his own POV becoming a story is glorious. It's less a duplicity as a devaluation of the researcher's feelings towards his humiliation because the storyteller simply sees that as a means to an end rather than as a legitimate position. I'll try to elucidate that a little more, too.
I really love this. It creates a pleasant, whimsical, comfy atmosphere and swerves into horribly unsettling territory at the end, and I don't remember anything else on the site (or possibly outside of it) that has managed to evoke that sequence of feelings for me as successfully.
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