Very good, nothing bad to say at all, has that creepy unknown vibe I like to see in SCP's.
Overall I like it. It seems a bit confusing to me though… ghost kids turning people into ragdolls, yeah, that's good nightmare fuel. But right now it's not shaking me because I'm trying to figure out the underlying logic. Without being able to see how everything fits together this seems too complicated and arbitrary to be frightening. Who are the ghost kids, why do they all wear animal masks, why do they go after people… it's not that these things need to be explained, but there needs to be enough hints that I can fill in the gaps.
There was an explanation in the first few drafts. However people told me they either took away from the scp feel or was narmy.
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Well, I haven't seen the original explanation, but I just kinda assumed that a) they're in the clothes they were wearing when they died, and, b) the masks each represent what their favourite animal was in life.
As for the rest? I dunno.
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Their favourite animal that was their precious doll, yes. I was trying to imply anyone who has every had a favourite doll may become one of them in death.
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I like this. (and you made it even better than the last draft I saw with those last additions, argh)
I do agree that it seems a little complicated/arbitrary/random, and that's the only real downside I can think of. Some choice hints would be nice, so long as they aren't silly-sounding. (I didn't see the original explanation so can't comment.)
Added in something that should maybe help tie things in together.
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As I said in chat, the ideas are good. But the problems I mentioned also remain. As people have commented, this is kind of arbitrary, and you've said you've been having a hard time working in something to tie it together. These problems stem from the fact that the SCP, in its current form, is a poor match for the clinical style of an SCP article. It's doing pretty well, but people are upvoting it on the strength of the ideas and the basically decent writing. I still feel it would work better as a creepypasta, where you wouldn't be constrained by the format and tone of an SCP, which I feel clashes with what you're trying to evoke.
I've added a few sentences to tie it in. I like the challenge and don't think there is really a line between creepypasta and SCP. The challenge is to creep and frighten without ever using subjective terms, and it's plainly fun. I plan to add a few documents to perhaps help the 'creepasta vs scp' conflict, but I simply don't see it.
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Pretty good, very creepy.
Only question I have is, during the transformation, do the people affected by keep their human body shape? And become like a realistic, life sized ragdoll. Or do is the subject's body shape changed by 747, causing them to become like the ragdoll in the picture?
The subject's body changes like the ragdoll picture.
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Ah, then you should probably put something saying that the limbs and body shape of the subject is altered.
I liked this a lot, I thought the ghost kids were very creepy and the clothes they were wearing when they died added an evocative touch. I didn't like the turning into dolls half as much, just seemed disconnected and generic. So, neutral vote I guess.
Why? Such a log would be unnecessary and wouldn't add anything to the article. I'm not putting one in just to have one.
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The thing I liked the most was the last paragraph. Why can't they be removed and why the hell is the last line about the dolls not being alive crossed out?
That made it for me. +1
