SCP Foundation

The description did not hook me at all but the story that came with this made up for it.

+1 cause I haven't read a good scip story in a while

While the story is good for the most part, there are a few grammatical errors sprinkled throughout (namely missing punctuation, improper capitalization, etc) which detract and made it harder to enjoy. Of particular note would be the spelling of Celsius as "celcius". Secondly, the tone of the interviews and transcripts seems off. The Foundation is an ultra-secretive organization tasked the the protection of humanity. It would therefore be expected that their language be professional and less nonchalant. I'm not saying that characters have to be monotone robots, it's just that there are other ways to flesh out characters than through their manner of speaking alone. Additionally, the designation of the D-Class seemed a little funky. A D-Class designation usually follows something along the lines of "D-insert number". The extra letters make it a little harder to read.
Overall though, its a solid idea and well-enough executed. No vote for now.

i find the writing to be a bit choppy, and reading through this had me losing interest as soon as i reached the third log.

this isn't HORRIBLE at all really, but i don't feel like it meets all the way up to writing standards.

-1 for now, i think this idea could be turned into something good though with some more polishing.

Echoing what seems to be the consensus here. It's pretty cool as articles go, but the logs are just slightly too choppy to be enjoyable, and you could easily cut them down a little bit. No vote, because there's some real potential for a great article.

Thanks for all the feedback. I'll make edits based on your advice and fix the grammar mistakes. I want to try hard to get this page up to par. If you have any suggestions on how to make it less choppy, they are much appreciated.

this is by far my favorite scp

Cool story, but the execution faltered in some places. Maybe revise your clinical tone and next time put it through the forums a couple more times.

Just some minor amendments, but I know when to appreciate a good story, regardless of whether it has been refined yet or not.

+1

Poor little dr Nelson failed to consider two questions, why was it contained in that jungle in the first place, and do you really want to let something out when someone went to all that effort to keep it there

There seems to be some inconsistencies. In the second post-exploration interview, Dr. Nelson mentioned SCP-3173-1. But 3173-1 doesn't seem to appear in the description.

In the first paragraph of the containment procedures, it says that civilian boats who approach are just to be redirected. But in the last paragraph, it says that anyone who even sees it or approach the forest are to be given amnestics AND redirected? I'm confused. Do you still give the amnestics to the approaching boats?

I gotta admit.. The story is damn good.

In short: I love the idea for this SCP. But instead of focusing on the mystery and story behind the SCP itself (the beating heart of the article), you branched off with with weird underwhelming supervillian thing that adds nothing to the main story.

If this was me, I would just ditch the whole evil doctor thing and leave it at the MTF Exploration log (aside from some clunky writing, I love that log!! Especially the "So, Close") and explore more concepts of the SCP. But I understand that this is your article and you do what you want. I heavily recommend taking a huge step back and looking everything over very carefully. For now, -1 but so, close to a good rating if you just shake the story up a bit.

Edit: Finally figured out how to fix the formatting problems.