Ok, let's see what we have here…
So first of all, I'm going to take a guess and say English is not your first language. I suggest you get significant help with that, because the grammar and wording made it very difficult for me to decipher what's going on. Also, this means that I am skipping the line-by-line.
As far as I can tell, the anomaly is a village of people that used to be normal, but are now ghosts. Right off the bat this isn't super interesting as an anomaly on its own. Ghosts and immortals have been done before. Now this doesn't mean the entire concept is lost, but it means that the story you're telling about these ghosts needs to be super compelling.
Unfortunately for you, the story isn't. I can barely tell what's going on. All I know is that some of the ghosts know they're dead, some of the ghosts don't and that the sky is always dark. None of these things really come together to tell a story about the anomaly, thus leaving me fairly uninterested
The other aspect of your story, the whole bit with the D-Class maybe murdering Officer Budiman feels entirely disjoint from the phantom people. Like, I see no reason why this story is connected to the phantom village other than the fact that it occurs there.
Finally the part with the hikers just confused me. I didn't understand that part at all.
Honestly… I know you put a lot of effort into this but I do not know how this can be salvaged. Mostly because I have no idea what this article is actually about. Is it about the villagers? Is it about the D-Class? Is it about the hitchhikers? You have so many half-developed facets that I can't grasp onto anything. It doesn't help that your base anomaly isn't very interesting on its own.
If you are really intent on making this draft work, write a summary of you idea and post it on Ideas and Brainstorming. Then wait to get feedback and thumbs up from multiple people before going back to drafting. You might have something here, but there's just so much happening that isn't developed I can't even tell what the point of this article is supposed to be.
Good luck!
