First draft on my first article
This is of course just a draft and some mistake might be present in the text, its purpose is to test the idea and receive some valuable tips for a futur draft.
First draft on my first article (updated)
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Summary:
update on my draft with now audio logs and a test report, I would like to receive some critique on it
Right so here is a list of what to do:
Refer to the SCP as "it" other than he/she
Put titles and names in bold
At the start of your description, remove the square cube and click to the left of the meter and click the Xy button, put in the y section and put 3 in it.
Use this instead of (censored) █████
Keter classification is for an SCP that is very/potentially dangerous and hard to contain, if it can't be contained then its an Apollyon class. The only thing that is dangerous about is:
The only accident related to the subject was in 2004 when a staff member bumped is head on SCP-…-1 and suffered minor injuries.
But I guess:
Since those observations have been made, no one know what will happen when the two subjects will make contact, and many theory divide the physician of the foundation.
Does make it a Keter class because of its potential.
as the fact that for the creation of a black hole to happen, the mass of SCP-…-1 and SCP-…-2 should be infinite, but once again the mass of both subject are unknown.
Something that has infinite mass would result in an infinitely massive black hole that would of formed very long ago before the foundation discovered it, but it could be 2 pieces of a black hole that somehow got spilt and when they meet it results in the black hole being created. The lightest black hole is about 3.8 times heavier than the sun and the heaviest is about 40 billion times heavier than the sun.
You have a good idea for an SCP, but maybe add some test records like trying to terminate it or something or trying to move it of course
thank you for your precious reply, I will uses your tipes and I will complete the article with some test record today or tomorrow. I appreciate your help :)
Right so here is a list of what to do:
Refer to the SCP as "it" other than he/she
Put titles and names in bold
At the start of your description, remove the square cube and click to the left of the meter and click the Xy button, put in the y section and put 3 in it.
Use this instead of (censored) █████
Keter classification is for an SCP that is very/potentially dangerous and hard to contain, if it can't be contained then its an Apollyon class. The only thing that is dangerous about is:
The only accident related to the subject was in 2004 when a staff member bumped is head on SCP-…-1 and suffered minor injuries.
But I guess:
Since those observations have been made, no one know what will happen when the two subjects will make contact, and many theory divide the physician of the foundation.
Does make it a Keter class because of its potential.
as the fact that for the creation of a black hole to happen, the mass of SCP-…-1 and SCP-…-2 should be infinite, but once again the mass of both subject are unknown.
Something that has infinite mass would result in an infinitely massive black hole that would of formed very long ago before the foundation discovered it, but it could be 2 pieces of a black hole that somehow got spilt and when they meet it results in the black hole being created. The lightest black hole is about 3.8 times heavier than the sun and the heaviest is about 40 billion times heavier than the sun.
You have a good idea for an SCP, but maybe add some test records like trying to terminate it or something or trying to move it of course
Collapsed duplicate post. ~Zyn
Right so here is a list of what to do:
Refer to the SCP as "it" other than he/she
Put titles and names in bold
At the start of your description, remove the square cube and click to the left of the meter and click the Xy button, put in the y section and put 3 in it.
Use █████ instead of (censored)
Keter classification is for an SCP that is very/potentially dangerous and hard to contain, if it can't be contained then its an Apollyon class. The only thing that is dangerous about is:
The only accident related to the subject was in 2004 when a staff member bumped is head on SCP-…-1 and suffered minor injuries.
Also his and not is.
But I guess:
Since those observations have been made, no one know what will happen when the two subjects will make contact, and many theory divide the physician of the foundation.
Does make it a Keter class because of its potential.
as the fact that for the creation of a black hole to happen, the mass of SCP-…-1 and SCP-…-2 should be infinite, but once again the mass of both subject are unknown.
Something that has infinite mass would result in an infinitely massive black hole that would of formed very long ago before the foundation discovered it, but it could be 2 pieces of a black hole that somehow got spilt and when they meet it results in the black hole being created. The lightest black hole is about 3.8 times heavier than the sun and the heaviest is about 40 billion times heavier than the sun.
You have a good idea for an SCP, but maybe add some test records like trying to terminate it or something or trying to move it of course
Collapsed duplicate post. ~Zyn
Put titles and names in bold
Uh… not really? Section headings need to be bolded, but names and titles in the description body don't need to be.
Does make it a Keter class because of its potential.
Again, not really? Unless the Foundation is actively exerting itself more for increased containment procedures, I don't think this would merit a Keter designation. Otherwise a lot of other anomalies would be bumped up a class for "potential to mess with stuff".
You have a good idea for an SCP, but maybe add some test records like trying to terminate it or something or trying to move it of course
I personally don't quite agree with this, mainly because not everyone will take termination logs seriously if they seem frivolous or illogical.
Should it be classed as safe even if one of the cube cannot be contain?
Probably not Safe if one of the things is loose, but if it's not too much trouble to run disinformation campaigns or the like, and whatever loose part of the anomaly can be easily tracked and doesn't really pose an issue to Foundation secrecy or a drain on resources, I don't see why it wouldn't be Euclid.
It really depends though. I didn't read through the entirety of the draft.
I really don't know, the subject is moving slowly, but nothing can make him stop or change is path, so it will cause massive problems and many resources to hide is presence when it will cross zone with an high population.
Also now I got audio logs and a test report
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