Okay uh… couple things:
- We're not a roleplay site. Please don't sign you posts with a fake doctor name. (Not that you need to sign any of your posts anyway; this is a forum and not an email chain, and your username is already automatically at the top of every comment you post. When you talk to someone IRL, you don't re-introduce yourself every time you speak.)
- I believe you wanted "Cryogenic" and not "Cyrogenic".
- Your link is wrong. It leads to the www.example.com placeholder domain, which you should have swapped out for the sandbox link when you used the automatic link-maker.
- As per the sidebar that's present on every page of the sandbox, Sandbox titles should have the author name, not draft name. The url should have your wikidot username in it, because currently it looks like the box belongs to someone with the username "Cyrogenic Wonders".
As for the draft itself… it's kind of a mess? Your containment is excessively-complicated for a Safe class (which should be the class that represents the easiest/simplest containment procedures), and has a lot of small errors. Generally, the number (#) numeration is used for extreme precision measurements that can be fatal if misinterpreted, like drug prescriptions. You don't need to do that for easy-to-count whole numbers. Don't refer to an SCP object as "the SCP"; that's considered colloquial language in-universe and shouldn't be present in a professional research document. It's O5 Councilmember, not 05, and I don't think they'd really care about this thing or need to get involved because they have more important things to deal with. Having the top-tier Foundation staff apparently need to sign off on small things like this tends to attract downvotes from skeptical readers. And so on.
The description is similarly problematic. Proper capitalization of numbers like twenty-four don't require either number to be capitalized, and the general rule is to write out the numbers only if they're less than 10. Otherwise, put the numbers. The description in general is kind of just a mass of a lot of numbers and stats, which can be both overwhelming and boring to a reader. The fact that you've got a ton of sub-designations just complicates the read further and makes it difficult to get through the piece.
Keep in mind that while you as the author are inherently invested in this work (since you wrote it), the audience is reading for entertainment. If you make the piece too complicated, they might not bother to even finish the read. Smoothness of progression and straightforward description is important.
I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make it less disorganized.
