Apparently, I am the author Zyn mentioned. So I am here to look through the work.
SCP-ZZZ-2 instances consist of the 1.3 million people who became comatose during the Kefka Event.
Why are those people even classified as SCPs? It seems that they are affected by another SCP, but they are not (in themselves) anomalous. They are simply in coma. Unless the coma is something so bizarre that conventional science cannot explain it, I am not buying your claim.
Outside of these 200 million instances and the 10 thousand instances maintained by The Foundation, the other roughly 1 billion SCP-ZZZ-2 instances have expired.
The numbers are not adding up. You said that there is supposed to be about a million -2 instances, and now there's over a billion? This is quite a glaring flaw.
four translucent humanoids
Is that part of the SCP's anomalous effects? Why have you not mention it in the main Description?
How did the Islamic State of Iraq and Syria obtain SCP-ZZZ-1.
This feels out of nowhere. Firstly, there is no indication or buildup that the ISIS is involved.
Secondly and more importantly, the SCP is set in the year 2008. ISIS was only a thing in 2014 CE. By 2008, the group was not even established. At best, it was simply Al-Qaeda's branch in Iraq. While it seems you are inserting ISIS to have an amoral group mentioned, it flops in effect.
Firstly, I do not accept the Apollyon classification. Sure, you are indeed writing in an apocalyptic setting. But it does not feel apocalyptic enough. I am not feeling the repercussions of over a million 'dead' people simultaneously. Other Apollyon articles did well to show the disaster and sense of "all Hell breaks loose" of their respective stories. Perhaps one can write a more nuanced Apollyon article, but yours is too unhappening that it feels like the regular SCP articles that merely interact with the SCP and concludes.
As for the SCP, I fathom it be a reality bender who did something akin to rapture to Muslims. I am no Islamic scholar, so I won't comment on the "rapture-esque" effect. There are more pressing concerns that work in the draft's detriment.
The SCP itself is nothing much in the end, being a reality bender that used some ambiguous device to amplify his powers to do some world-scale catastrophe. Frankly, the ambiguous device is a pointless add-on. The fact you did not even bother with a description of the device (be it appearance or inner workings) shows that the device lacks depth. It can well be the reality bender only.
As for the interview, you have changed course to a statement regarding Islamic extremism (i.e. extremism by people who happen to claim to profess the Islamic religion). It does little to build up the apocalyptic expectations of the Apollyon class, and it simply reduces the concerns of contemporary Muslims down to a purely religious line of thinking (I can assure you that there are more dimensions than solely religion at work). The interview does not add depth to either the reality bender or the apocalyptic context, which will hamper the reading of the story. Rather, I would argue that the SCP is simply a means for you to make a few statements regarding a hot topic in recent years.
So my suggestion (if you intend to progress) is to focus broader on implications. The fact that over a million people are in coma have way more repercussions that a mere interview between two people cannot address in depth. Also, if you wish to go on with your commentary, weave in nuances into it. Consider strongly to write about characters with depth, rather than a superficial trope regarding recent perceptions of a niche group of Muslims.
