SCP-XXXX is currently contained in a 15 x 22-centimeter, 10- centimeter deep clamshell safe
Are the measurements necessary? Does the object have to be in a safe that are these specific measurements or would any safe do?
at Site ██████
Blanking out containment procedures is an immediate downvote for a lot of people. Remember, you are writing this as if it was an actual document. If the containment procedures are blanked out, how will the Foundation know how to contain it or in this case, where this object even is?
under the supervision of Dr. ███████.
Again, blanking out in containment procedures is not good and why is this under the supervision of one person? What if this person goes on holiday or is busy elsewhere or something? Is there any reason only one doctor can supervise this?
SCP-XXXX is still rated Object Class: Safe as long as its cap is screwed on.
This is completely unnecessary and should just be removed.
SCP-XXXX is a 5oz
You need to use metric measurements as stated in the guides: http://www.scp-wiki.net/how-to-write-an-scp
clear glass bottle of orange-red hot sauce labeled "Burning Gut Hot Sauce" in English on the oval paper label affixed to it.
The writing here doesn't flow very well, might be better to separate this out a bit or just refine the description a bit.
SCP-XXXX came to the attention of Foundation personnel following the YouTube Channel, ████████, posting a video about hot sauce and hot peppers. Content creator ███████ showcases several popular brand sauces until coming to SCP-XXXX. ███████ notes that he has never tried SCP-XXXX and then he dabs small amounts onto two chicken wings, one of which he eats and the other is eaten by ███████ an emerging hip-hop performer from the U.K. On the video, ███████ looks perplexed as he eats the sauced wing, and comments about the lack of "capsaicin content", while ███████ sweats profusely and appears to be suffering from the extreme spice. ███████ pours more sauce onto the remainder of his chicken wing and eats it to no visible effect. A minute passes and then ███████ clutches his stomach and collapses off frame, pulling his camera down with him, killing the visual feed. Audio picks up screams of pain from ███████ and terror-filled expletives from ███████. Audio cuts off right after ███████ shouts, "Bloody hell, what's that? What the fuck is that!"
1. Too many black boxes.
2. This whole paragraph is boring and really only needed to be a sentence or too. This goes into way too much pointless details. A sentence saying "SCP-XXXX was discovered after a YouTuber reviewing hot sauce came into contact with the item."
3. I have absolutely no idea what this thing is. Is it poisonous hot sauce? That doesn't seem anomalous at all?
Addendum #A: Testing with SCP-XXXX has so far revealed that it acts as a perfectly normal, if extremely hot sauce, though certain individuals will not taste its spice. Instead, these individuals will experience a sudden, fatality-inducing eruption from their stomach and bowels moments after ingesting the sauce.
Again, this doesn't seem anomalous.
The anomalies borne from this violence have been classified SCP-XXXX-1 and are deemed too aggressive to safely contain, and should be terminated upon their occurrence.
What? What are SCP-XXXX-1? You haven't mentioned this at all???
