First off, there's no need to put "No edits are allowed unless you come to me first." because sandbox pages are automatically locked to the editors. Only mods and admins can edit pages on the sandbox that they didn't create.
With regards to the article… I feel like the concept really should have been put through the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you started the draft. There seems to be too much packed in, and I really don't think this would be Thaumiel given that it has a tendency to teleport away. Even if the Foundation knows how to get it back (which I'm not sure I believe they'd be able to figure out on their own), there's no guarantee that it'll never just up and leave permanently.
There's also the whole "increase dopamine by 3000%" part, which kind of just comes off as bad science. Too much dopamine can cause all sorts of negative side effects, assuming that it doesn't just kill a person outright.
So far as the writing goes… it's kind of shaky. Right from the start:
SCP-3324 is a petite grand piano at a height of 1.37 meters tall. SCP-3324 weighs in at a total of 227.6 kilograms. The age of SCP-3324 is speculated to be around [REDACTED] years old and is in pristine condition, showing no signs of aging; SCP-3324 does require dusting and tuning every week to prevent SCP-3324 from leaving Site-19.
You've got run-on repetitive sentences, and casual phrasing like "weighs in at" which seems more appropriate for wrestling match commentary than professional documentation. Also, I believe the more-commonly-used name is "baby grand piano"? I would have worded it as:
| SCP-3324 is a baby grand piano, standing 1.37 m tall and weighing 227.6 kg. Though SCP-3324 is speculated to be approximately ████(however many boxes you want) years old, it is in pristine condition and shows no signs of aging. |
The "SCP-3324 does require dusting and tuning every week to prevent SCP-3324 from leaving Site-19." part can be put in the containment procedures. And so on. But the draft will be a lot easier to fix if you first make sure your concept is solid enough to merit drafting.
I recommend getting the concept checked before working on the draft. Please use the Ideas and Brainstorming forum I linked you to.
