SCP Foundation

[http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/doctor-mollon-labe]

Okay, clearing out backlogged unanswered threads. This is a quick read; here are my thoughts:

First impression: the draft is messy. Your rating module coding is improperly done; it should be aligned to the right and you shouldn't see the alignment coding displayed in the article itself. You've incorrectly made the "Safe" in the object class lowercase, you should write out all numbers less than 10 if they're not measurements with units, and the entirety of your containment procedures and description is a giant wall of text that should really be broken up into separate paragraphs. Failure to properly portion and space out related bits of information for a smooth read makes an author's work look sloppy and like the author didn't know how to organize their thoughts, so they just put everything in the same spot for the reader to dig through.

The containment is excessively-specific and doesn't have proper spacing after punctuation at the end of some sentences. Inches are not metric and shouldn't be used. Why is there so much crossed-out text at the start? Level-3 should be written as such, not "level 3". Tungsten can be expensive; why is so much needed? 10 meters is about 32 feet, taller than a 3 story building, so your measurements don't really make sense. And so on. I recommend reading this guide on containment to get a feel for how to write more logical, resource-conserving procedures.

So far as the concept goes… it needs work. It's just a chair that compels people (and animals? You probably want sapient, not sentient) to sit on it and then does weird stuff to them. Take a look at the articles tagged with "compulsion"—it's a pretty commonly-done approach. That said, if the effect breaks down without someone wanting to sit on the chair (thus necessitating that the author godmode and force people to want to sit in the chair), that makes for a pretty lame narrative.

I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more workable and smooth.

You need to space out the text more, my eyes find it hard to read these big walls of text, all grouped together like that. Fix that first, and I'll be able to deliver more helpful feedback on the sentence structure etc.

I think the code for your collapsibles needs to be fixed a little. After clicking it, there's a placeholder ("Title for hiding text") that needs to be changed/removed. Little nit picky but thought I'd let you know now. As for the SCP itself, I agree with Zyn that the concept is a little lackluster. However, I think if you find something to just add to the SCP itself (maybe other than compulsion it has some other anomalous effect? idk) then the SCP would be better received.