The container for SCP-3208 should be secured by a standard DNA fingerprint-scan lock.
I would get rid of this sentence. I'm not a huge fan of going into specifics about containment, especially if you include the exact combination to a lock or something. Your's isn't doing this, but it still looks wrong.
Any civilians who have ingested SCP-3208 are to be terminated then subsequently administered Class A amnestics.
I'm not sure you understand the meaning of 'terminated'. To put it bluntly, a bullet works plenty well for erasing memory - you don't need the amnestics.
Okay, that thing that I just strikethrough-ed was my actual response before I read the rest of the article. I might add in a 'upon resuscitation' in there somewhere.
1. There are currently 64 instances of SCP-3208 in the Foundation’s possession
This should be in the main article, not in a footnote. Just say "a group consisting of 64'.
Instances of SCP-3208 are found in oddly specific places
'Odddly Specific' sounds very nonclinical, and I really don't see what's so specific about the list of places you later mentioned. Maybe just say "Instances of SCP-3208 always appear in specific places; it has been found in x"
The recovery log seems unnecessary and badly formatted. I would recommend getting rid of it, but if you want to keep it than you should simply use bullet points instead of the column of boxes.
The journal thing sounds like it was written by either a drunk robot or a really drunk human.
"hah, man, i fell down this cliff and like, died man. maybe something else eventful will happen tomorrow, dude"
It also reads like your taking a puzzle piece, sawing off one end, jamming it into somewhere it wasn't meant to go, stomping on it a few times for good measure, and pretending that it looks fine. In short, you are really shoehorning it in, no human would write and act like the one above, and in such a convenient manner for the foundation to find it.
Concept wise… it needs a lot of work. You see a lot of drafts based off of video game mechanics here, and the problem with them is that they have been done so many times because the concept of x mechanic is well known and unoriginal. Something based off of a game mechanic has to have pretty fucking unique twist or format screw, and yours doesn't.
I would heavily advise getting your concept checked in the ideas and brainstorming forum. There's maybe a 50% chance you posted it there and nobody replied to it, but that isn't an excuse not to get it checked, not when the IRC chat is a thing. Basically, go on chat, if you have no idea how to do that make sure you read all the tabs of the chat guide. If you still have no fucking clue what you're doing you could ask either the questions desk or PM me.
Anyway, go onto #thecritters and ask if anyone wants to help with a concept, if they say yes, link your idea post, if nobody responds, keep the tab open and go do something else. Check back every 3 or 4 minutes to see if chat has died down, if it looks like they've finished ask again.
