SCP Foundation

Note: I correct the given mistake only once. If you do not use the metric system, I will only make a single comment about it, even if it appears again in the rest of the article. If the draft has many language problems, I will only correct the most glaring ones.

[SCP-xxxx is arranged in a living-room-sized space. The place is really furnished like a warm living room.

Remember to use clinical tone. Actually, just say:

''SCP-XXXX is contained in a standard humanoid containment cell with appropriate furnishings.''

The Foundation isn't a hotel, after all.

Beyond that, there is not any additional special containment procedure required., despite the door has an appliance which can release high tense electricity in an emergency.

Why is the punctuation off here?

''No additional containment procedures are necessary, apart from an electrical proximity charge situated near the containment cell entrance.''

Personnel with any security clearance can stay alone with SCP-xxxx for it does not have any hostility or aggressivity. Personnel with Level 3 or higher security clearance can contact SCP-xxxx.
NO LITERATURE ABOUT THE DARK SIDE OF HUMAN NATURE OR NEGATIVE WORD IS ALLOWED IN THE FACE OF SCP-xxxx!]

You don't have to CAPITALISE for emphasis. This is a professional document, people are expected to follow it to the letter. Also, what does 'the dark side of human nature or negative word' actually mean?

SCP-xxxx looks like a 23-year-old white male with curly and black hair and brown eyes.

I come across this a lot, but don't use 'seems to' or 'appears to be' unless the effect or object actually isn't what it seems like.

Okay so, in place of a line-by-line, I'm going to give general thoughts in 'concept' below.

This is honestly a bit of a mess, and below I'll explain why.

• The grammar is off, it's not written in the style of a professional report and some sentences make no real sense:

SCP-xxxx will be depressed to be put in a cold and stressful place and will refuse to do anything.

I think you meant to say:

''SCP-XXXX responds poorly to enviroments with low temperatures or when exposed to stress.''

It's helpful to read up on something like clinical tone. I recommend reading Clinical Tone: Declassified to get a better understanding on the style of writing we look for in SCP articles.

• The containment procedures are extremely lenient, something a lot of novice authors stumble over. The Foundation isn't a hotel, it's more akin to a prison. We secure. We contain. We protect. SCP objects should not be allowed any contact with the outside world, because that's a security breach. SCP objects should not be allowed out of their containment when not being transported, and should not be given access to other SCP objects, because that is a containment breach. SCP objects that lash out at staff are to be smacked down as brutally as necessary, not appeased, because to do otherwise is a failure to protect against it.
• It reads like an OC/Fanfiction character. It's good at pretty much anything it does, it's easy for it to breach containment without any reason provided why this is the case and it has access to other SCPs just because.
• As it stands now, there are still serious grammatical and tonal errors. However, I think the most pressing matter is that too much time is spent painstakingly describing the SCP rather than in making it interesting.

Humanoids are actually among the most difficult types of articles to write successfully; if you're really set on writing one, then first take a look at the humanoid writing guide if you haven't yet.

After that, I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more interesting and give you some advice on structuring the eventual article for smoothness of reading and narrative.