Okay, clearing up some backlogged unanswered threads, this is a quick read. Here are my thoughts:
Quibbles:
- The containment procedures paragraphs need to have a line space between them.
- under the guise of an oil drilling operation > I feel like this might attract unwanted attention, especially from environmentalist groups and other oil businesses? Maybe just have the island be private property or some kind of super-exclusive private getaway?
- immediately terminated by security personnel. > not sure about attempts being terminated. Impeded? Obstructed? Prevented?
- "Dr. Tyler is currently accepting all proposals > who is Tyler even and why do they get a special mention in the containment? Also, proposals for what?
- SCP-3874 has displayed moderate resistance to amnestics. > paragraph needs a line space at the end
- giving it the power to drain life from any animate mammalian organism > ehhh… per the the humanoid writing guide, "if what's anomalous about your humanoid SCP object can be most accurately described as a voluntary "power" or "ability", you should probably start over". This power in particular is pretty common across popular media, from the Snow White and the Huntsman movie (the evil queen) to anime like Buso Renkin (the black kakugane users).
- just over 1.3 kilometers > "just over" seems a little casual.
- Nothing anomalous has been observed about flora and fauna on the island, > I feel like this doesn't need to be mentioned
- aside from genetic deviations consistent with normal island endemism > if it's normal, it's not anomalous.
- Permission to designate the native primates Antillothrix docbrightus is pending approval. > not entirely sure this needs to be mentioned, since silly references to old senior staff might merit downvotes from some readers who are tired of the namedrops
So… I'll be honest, this isn't usually my type of article, since I prefer shorter, more straightforward reads without a lot of collapsed material or logs. I do like the narrative development of the work, and the interview at the end is pretty solid. What I'm not sure about is the "life sucking" ability, since as I mentioned, it's a little commonly-seen across popular media, and with it being so simply "lifesucking" you run the risk of this being just a powered-up humanoid, even with the backstory and the accompanying disfigurement. Maybe alter the ability slightly to suit the narrative? Maybe that effect only affects whales that the guy has hunted himself or stalked for a few days? I dunno. Something less blunt than just "sucks life out of". I guess I'm also just tired of seeing interview logs that end with "so then there were casualties, here's what happened to the bodies/here's the death count".
Overall though, pretty solid writing. Maybe also get some feedback from our history experts to see what they think.
