My First SCP!
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My First SCP!
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Summary:
Would love some feedback on the first draft of my very first SCP!
Weaknesses
First: it contradicts it’s self in the sense that all electronic devices are cut off, including life signatures but later you say at 50m into SCP-XXXX-1 life signature cuts out due to SCP-XXXX-2 not like you would know that anything past 40m in due to camera and radio feed cutting out as well and the D-class personnal represses the memory so they wouldn’t tell you anything unless forced.
Second: the “Specal Containment Prosedures” should go into fuller detail as in “where would the chains go” for example.
Third: SCP-XXXX-2 seems a bit cliche, but how it works is a good idea
Strength
the idea of it “rejecting” individuals is intriguing, you may want to go in depth with that
Idea
In addendum 1 put a log of D-class exploring SCP-XXXX-1 that may be interesting
Conclusion
In my eyes1 this SCP has potential however if it has been done before2will not support this SCP. And I am sorry for any problems I may have caused due to this first post.
Complex mind this critique is not up to the standard required in the help forums. While you are correct that is a discrepancy, pointing out one mistake isn't enough. You need to provide a more general review of the article that identifies its strengths, weaknesses, and areas where it needs improvement. This is because the forum crit team prioritizes reviewing threads with no replies, so it is imperative that all crit posts are in depth enough to meaningfully workshop the presented draft. Please be more mindful in the future.
Sorry I’m new to the site, I’m just trying to help out before trying my hand at it, School free time is not enough time to scan the entire article.
I’m just trying to help out before trying my hand at it myself
Pointing out only a few things can give the author the wrong impression of their draft, since they may think that because you only pointed out a few errors, that their draft is otherwise mainlist-ready.
This sort of feedback has resulted in people posting work too soon to the site, getting it downvoted, and being angry at the review process. As such, giving low-content feedback can end up being harmful to a draft.
School free time is not enough time to scan the entire article
Then please let someone with more time handle making the first review. What grade are you in?
Sophomore I started school in genral a year early
Uh… you might want to improve your grammar, spelling, and punctuation when you post comments on the site then, otherwise people won't believe that you're actually a high schooler.
That said, it does sound like you wouldn't have covered clinical tone yet, so definitely do some self study on professional-level writing if you want to be helpful as a reviewer on the site.
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