Moved to Questions Desk since you're just asking about the interview here.
With regards to:
I really dont know how to make anyone seem "human". Can someone give me some notes?
First establish the characters who are speaking, and the context behind why they are speaking. If any of them has a particular speech-related quirk, it needs to make sense in-context. Someone who stutters, for example, should have an in-universe reason to do so. Interviewers should come off as polite and understanding but still detached—the Foundation would train interviewers before letting them ask questions. Standard procedure for pretty much any medical profession that involves a lot of question-asking, really.
Something that can also help is reading out the dialogue yourself. If you can imagine yourself or someone else talking like that naturally, that's usually a good sign. Stuff like "time is 9 hours. So, uh, Dr, tell me about your time." doesn't quite sound natural because "tell me about your time" isn't really a phrase that is heard often at all (at least by me).
Furthermore, you should have a good idea about what story the interview is supposed to tell. What you have here is basically one doctor freaking out about how scary/traumatic/scarring an experience is in an overly blunt manner. The "You will NEVER understand what I went through!" line almost sounds like that of an angsty teenager. It's not really clear what the point of the interview was, and it comes off as excessively lead-on-y in an attempt to get the audience to feel fear that just isn't there when it's coming off so excessively strongly.
