SCP Foundation

This is really my first SCP. It has never been very good, but with the latest updates I added a good storyline to it and removed the shitty format screw, so it's not trying too hard to be unique. It's called "Jailbreak." Have a look and please tell me what could be improved, or if it's a lost cause.

http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/dr-graves

Let's see what we have here….

Ok, so I'm going to skip the line-by-line because this article suffers from conceptual and structural issues that are more important than me picking apart wording.

So overall I have a very hard time believing that the Foundation would create an anomaly, to cause containment breaches, to test their staff. I'm sorry but at a basic suspension of disbelief level this does not compute for me. It seems like the Foundation is taking an absurdly high risk in all aspects of this. Specifically:

• I don't see why they would test researchers with real breaches and not fake ones.
• I don't see why they would create a meme in order to accomplish this task.

And personally I can't picture a way you could convince me that this is a reasonable and correct course of action.

While I may not be able to see what's salvageable from this idea, I don't like saying that any concept is impossible to pull off. So, if you want to continue with this direction, I suggest you post a summary of your description to the Ideas and Brainstorming forums, and get feedback and approval there before taking another crack at this draft.