SCP Foundation

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Your section headers should be bolded, as per the standard format. The guide linked above has information on this too.

SCP-xxxx is to be kept in a containment cell of choosing, as long as no windows can view SCP-xxxx at any time. Doors must also have no windows or holes, as well as ceilings, floors or other surfaces. However, cameras are permitted.

This seems somewhat over the top when the thing can just be stuffed into a box and ignored. Excessive containment procedures tend to strain suspension of disbelief, which isn't exactly how you want to start an article off.

The method of how the retina is severed is not well understood, but is believed to be at the molecular level.

The second part of the sentence is disjointed from the first, as "molecular level" relates more to scale than method.

The strangest quality of SCP-xxxx is that naturally blind subjects can restore their vision by standing within a twenty meter radius of SCP-xxxx and temporarily see, even when leaving the area. (effect usually lasts about 2 hours.)

Explicitly stating that one part of the article is particularly strange strains clinical tone a bit, and I don't think this is necessarily weirder than retina-severing at a distance. Try to minimize in-article commentary where possible unless it's serving a storytelling purpose. Also, parenthetical statements should go inside the sentence they relate to.

The American Government has requested further research into SCP-xxxx to try and find a cure for natural blindness (Born with, disease caused, Etc).

But no other governments care? More seriously, this statement implies a very different relationship between the Foundation and national governments than most do, and might not be worth conflicting with convention unless you're telling a specific story about that.

The Main concern over SCP-xxxx is that if a containment breach were to occur, a blind retrieval team would have to be sent.

Main doesn't need to be capitalized here. It also feels a bit like in-article commentary as noted above. If this is a large concern, it probably belongs in containment procedures instead of at the end of the description.

SCP-xxxx appears to be made of plastic and has a clear ceramic casing. However, no one knows what holds the two together because of the fact that no bonding material, even residue, has been found,

This should probably go earlier in the description since it directly relates to the composition of the anomaly. Having it at the end really dulls any impact the article might have, since it's not particularly exciting or interesting.

Ultimately, the concept here just isn't that interesting. We see a lot of these "vaguely thematic magic object" articles, and it's very hard to do them in a satisfying way at this point. Most successful articles have some form of narrative included in them, even if it's not their primary focus. I would recommend running your concepts by the Ideas and Brainstorming section in the future, so you can catch problems related to this before drafting.