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this can cause SCP-XXXX to stop working for a while.

So generally, there is no reason to explain why containment procedures are done. It's assumed by the researchers that the steps needed are important. They can usually figure out context from the description.

thus far the noise has been proven to cure many mental illnesses.

This could be changed to be a little more clincial. Like this:

Noise produced by SCP will cure the mental illness of those who listen to it.

SCP-XXXX-1 was reported taking one listener, to "another place"

This is very unclear. It sounds like he's taking a bad acid trip, but I feel like it's trying to imply he actually went somewhere else?

SCP-XXXX-1, when recorded, cannot be reused as each soundwave it creates is new.

Just say "Recordings of SCP-XXXX-1 are non-anomalous." That gets the point across. You can include a line earlier saying each -1 instance is unique.

the listener will render unconscious,

Looks like you are missing a "be".

Anyone under the influence of SCP-XXXX-1 will levitate, once SCP-XXXX-1 is done the levitating will stop the reason for this is unknown.

This entire portion could use a rewrite to be more clinical and less redundant. For example:

Subjects under the influence of SCP-XXXX-1 will levitate approximately four feet into the air; this effect ceases upon conclusion of SCP-XXXX-1.

So now that i've got an idea about the SCP, the containment procedures could really be updated to include the SCP being put in a locked box without a power source, since it doesn't activate on its own.

No more tests to do with mental illnesses are to be carried out on SCP-XXXX, enough with the logs the SCP is understood.

This is really unnecessary and grammatically poorly written. Why does an O5 need to tell people to stop testing on this? That should be the head researchers job.

I'm going to skip over the test logs, because 1.) they really aren't necessary and 2.) you've got larger conceptual issues I'd like to address first.

So, as this concept it, it will not survive being posted to the mainlist. I'm going to try to adequately explain why, and why you should take this in a different direction.

First: This is, in my opinion, incredibly tone-deaf and and in rather poor taste. Mental illnesses is a much more difficult topic to write about than say, physical illness. Your writing should reflect how nuanced this issue is, but this concept doesn't. It does a large disservice to the idea of having and struggling with mental illness. In reality, overcoming a mental illness is done with lots of therapy and medication, which isn't easy. A lot of people never get better, and struggle with this for the rest of their lives. I'm not trying to state you can't write about mental illness, because people can and should, but it should be afforded the depth it needs to adequately express why this is such a deep issue. At the moment, your SCP is basically the equivalent of someone saying "Why don't you just stop being depressed?".

So, I would suggest an alternative. Take the base concept, which is "A speaker whose sound affects the listener" and take that in a different direction. My first SCP concept was similar; it was a sound file that transported listeners to another world. Maybe try taking it in a direction like that.

1. The Flaws.

Check back at the two collapsible above.

2. Ways to improve.

Best way to improve would be to hone your sense of technical and clinical writing by using the corrections I gave you.

Also, I'm not sure if the concept here can be improved without taking it in a different direction. See my "Concept" collapsible.

3. What is unclear about my SCP.

It's pretty straight forward. The only thing I'm unclear about, is that woman in the abyss having sex with the listeners, and thats what cures them?

4. Is my SCP a copy-cat of any SCP. (if so link the SCP I accidentally copied)

Can't say that the base concept is, but we get a lot of failed SCPs that try to "cure" mental illness like this.

5. A way to polish my draft before uploading it into the SCP database.

As I stated earlier, this draft is not going to survive the main page. Your concept needs to be either majorly reworked, or scrapped for now.