SCP Foundation

"Any organic matter that makes physical contact with SCP-XXXX and that then ceases said contact will begin to accelerate upwards at rate of approximately 3.14 m/s2. Events of this nature are referred to as atmospheric buoyant events, or ABEs."

http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/scpcrnp

This is a refined version of an SCP I posted a bit ago. I will attempt to mainlist this soon pending insightful criticisms. Your suggestions and comments are appreciated.

I moved your thread summary content to the first post and trimmed it above, OP, since it was taking up a lot of space on the forum listing. Try to keep thread descriptions under 7 lines so you don't visually crowd out other people's threads. ~Zyn

Okay, taking a quick look at this since it fell to page 5 with no replies. Here are my thoughts:

Couple wording issues here and there:

• "is forbidden for all but" > maybe just note that access is limited to [allowed people]
• "personnel who have been consented" > who have consented?
• "briefed regarding site safety to a security clearance level of 2" > this phrasing in general is just very confusing. Also, general site safety measures shouldn't typically be restricted to security clearance levels, right? Also, Level-2.
• "Attempts to dismantle SCP-XXXX were unsuccessful and thus relocation deemed infeasible." > not a procedure, doesn't belong in containment
• 335 meter-tall, concrete building > Google tells me that's almost 1099 feet… nearly a 110-story building. That's a hell of a lot of concrete.
• 102 m chain-link fence > 334 feet, ~33 story building. That is a very, very tall chain link fence. It'd probably attract a hell of a lot of attention too. Why is any of this necessary?
• No need to put feet measurement conversion in the description. The Foundation would only need the metric.

Overall… I dunno about this. I admittedly kind of lost interest in reading about midway into the description, mainly because I was getting cartoony Marvel Universe Thor vibes and the ABE designation just seemed a little silly. And given that I'm not a huge fan of super long SCP articles that have a ton of collapsible content, I admit felt disinclined to finish the read after attempting to slog through the first collapsible. Granted, I am definitely biased in this respect, but that may have contributed to why this hit page 5 unanswered.

Did you happen to get the concept checked before drafting?