Author, I'll be honest with you, this is a badly-written draft. Not only do you have a lot of formatting issues, nearly every instance of expungment is poorly-done (without proper context, blocking out information can be seen as a cop-out on the part of the author, or just otherwise lazy narrative), the description doesn't directly tell the reader what the object is or does, and the phrasing is often more casual than clinical.
What grade are you currently in at school? Most SCP authors have at least some college-level writing experience, and it can be hard to write an article if you haven't practiced writing in clinical tone. If you tell me where you are academically, we can recommend some extra resources you can study up on, such as these resources for clinical tone:
http://www.aje.com/en/arc/editing-tip-maintaining-formal-tone-scientific-writing/
http://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/scholarlyvoice/tone
https://healthcare.utah.edu/brand-and-style-guide/writing-guide.php
The most pressing issue here, however, is that the idea is not interesting.
I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you. Given that your previous drafts did not do well for similar reasons, I highly recommend not skipping that step in the writing process from now on.
