There's more to MC&D than just "Lolcannibalism".
This has been sitting in my sandbox since the Halloween contest, but I wound up not submitting it since it really didn't have a lot to do with Halloween. Then Mr Wilt stuck his big fat nose where it went looking for porn in my san nagged me for days politely requested that I post it. After a few minor edits, here it is. Enjoy. Everything listed is, in fact, an SCP.
Oh, hey, this is one of mine! Cool!
That said, I'm a little unclear what's going on here. If he's trying to spread SCP-833, this seems like a kinda ineffectual way to do it, since nearly all the attendees died.
EDIT: Wait a minute, is this guy in the cult I refer to, and the blackboxes are then 643?
Regarding the blackboxes: I didn't intend it that way, no.
Everyone who was there at all got infected. About a quarter of the people who were there were actually involved in the 643 mess. Everyone passed out a roughly the same time from overeating, but the nomming that was done was focused on a few people. Those who just happened to get yanked in while walking by were relatively unscathed, while some people just got wrecked.
I can't read it all now, but for the first part that I did read, the spoken dialogue felt like a kid trying to be "fancy" and speaking with his pinky out.
EDIT: The fact that it is not MC&D doesn't really excuse the dialogue. Overall, it feels disjointed (heh) and relies solely on squick, and not very effective squick at that. -1
Man… unfortunately, I do find this pretty meh. Writing's good, though.
The story has Flanders enraptured by cheese, but the following report excerpt says he was effected by liver coated with 643 chocolate.
This disconnect distracted me from enjoying what is otherwise a nicely executed bit of gore.
my god… for a second, my mind was screaming "VORE" While reading this…. wow.
Well written, good descriptions, and captivating story +1